Sunday, 22 March 2015

lilly's camp story

writing 
I’ve been learning to ‘show not tell’ in my writing

Flying camp

My heart thumped and pumped my knees started to knock! “Whoooo!’’ I yelled as I got hurled up. I was like an eagle in the sky . I  dared not  look down but my head got the better of me... I stared hard at the ground , thoughts rushed through my head like rush hour at a train station. “What was I doing... but look at this view....  but what was I doing..... I’m gonna fall but look at that lake!

 As my wings started to lower me I felt astounded , my feet hit the gorgeous safe  ground . My heart slowed. I was so happy I nearly kissed the ground but then the anchor called “Kiwi are you ready!”  Here we go again

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